I love the first large paragraph of this story. It is very descriptive and I have a clear picture of him on his stallion
The phrasing of the words is similar to reading A. I like the phrasing and wish I could recreate a story with such a tone.
Could be something to try in the future
The bow and arrows are described excellently. They are highly detailed. So far, I am not sure if that is symbolizing they will be important later, but so far it is just a side detail
I see his anger for Väinämöinen remains
Forgiveness is not one of Joukahainen character traits
Reminds me just a little bit of Anakin Skywalker, letting his fear and anger control him. But in a different way for sure
Quite interesting that his mother stopped him from losing an arrow at Väinämöinen. I'm confused because I thought he traveled away by horse so how did his mother get there?
I like the lead-up in this story. It seems to be preparing the reader for the climax in the next story.
This story does not delve into emotions much. I would try to adapt it and include a more emotional tone
But I do like the story without it too. It feels more like watching an event from the outside without knowing any of the actors
I love this moment of conflict within Joukahainen. The detail of one hand is ready and the other hand is not, depicts his inner struggle well
Great fine details about his movements and items
After Joukahainen shoots a few arrows, I am confused how Väinämöinen would not notice
I do not love the ending of this story. The action is ok, but I would have preferred something more interactive between the two. However, I think it is written very well, and it aligns with who I think the characters are.
I am assuming Väinämöinen is not dead, just badly injured. The story is worded in a way that makes me think he is still alive.
I like how it ends with Joukahainen talking again with his mother and his mother not liking his actions. It wraps up his story with his mother
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